things to improve and review

things to improve:

- vocabulary

- organization so my last paragraph connects seamlessly to with my first

        - beat into my head that quantity is less important then quality and not to stress about how           long my essays are.

Review ideas

1. The Blind Side

2.UP

        3. Precious

4. Dear John

5. Paris, je t'aime

6. New York, I love you

7.  The Hurt Locker

8. Where the Wild Things Are

9. Milk

        10. Son of sam

book ideas

1. Atonement

2. Kite Runner

3. The Brief Wondorous life of Oscar Wao

4. A Thousand Splendid Suns

5. Life of Pi

6.Middlesex

7. Everything is Illuminated

8. The Glass Castle

9. Beloved

Things I want to work on in my writing

1. Make my transitions better

2. Make my one idea flow well with the next and make them less choppy

3. Work on integrating my thesis more into the body of my essay

4. Work on my vocab

Writing Goals

1. I am proud of having a strong voice in my writing.

2. I am have a problem with organization and making sure my ideas flow well in my essays.

3. I would like to learn how to organize my thoughts better and to make my essay more fluid and work on my transitions.

Quote Reaction #3

"This was Comstock's debut, and over the next decades he merely enriched his technique with decoy letters, false signatures, impersonations, and an army of spies. To the end of his days he loved sleuthing, relishing above all personal encounters and the arrest of the enemy.(pg. 137)"

In this quote is the lead in to describing Margaret's enemy in the fight for female birth control. The whole paragraph was informative but had a certain kind of kick to it. The paragraph listed what he did and how he single-handedly created the Comstock Law's that impacted an entire generation. I really like how her opinion was obvious but it was done in a classy way. She described him as a charlatan without having to use those exact words. I hope to be able to express myself in my essay as gracefully as Sanger did in this section.